Where to start? First. I really like how your tenses changed from past to present for this part. It lends a sense of immediacy and urgency that fairly propels the reader forward. Usually I like to comment as I go, but I just had to read the whole of this in one shot.
So many things I liked. That Lex and Clark have shaped one another and while Lex recognizes that consciously, Clark seems to have the knowlege hover just under the surface of his consciousness.
How much do I love that he's grown up? Yes, still rash, still passionate, but his answer to the guide's comment about fairness and soul saving was spot on -- How else could Clark answer? He literally cannot save everyone. And how many bitter survivors had asked him the same question? That's a sadness in and of itself right there.
His guide -- I've got my guess as to who it is. I hope I'm right and all will fall into place just as it should, finally.
(one note, who or what are the endless? Feel free to point me at a link or some other reference!)
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Date: 2007-02-25 10:46 am (UTC)So many things I liked. That Lex and Clark have shaped one another and while Lex recognizes that consciously, Clark seems to have the knowlege hover just under the surface of his consciousness.
How much do I love that he's grown up? Yes, still rash, still passionate, but his answer to the guide's comment about fairness and soul saving was spot on -- How else could Clark answer? He literally cannot save everyone. And how many bitter survivors had asked him the same question? That's a sadness in and of itself right there.
His guide -- I've got my guess as to who it is. I hope I'm right and all will fall into place just as it should, finally.
(one note, who or what are the endless? Feel free to point me at a link or some other reference!)